10 Revision Tips: make your editing more efficient

Step 1: Run a super fancy-schmancy spell (i.e. STYLE) check
Go to your word processing program’s "style" spell check options and select any/all of the following:

• Wordiness
• Unclear phrasing
• Passive Sentences
• Verb Phrases
• Punctuation
• Sentence Length
• Clichés, colloquialisms, and jargon
• Fragments

Step 2: We’re all too wordy. Cut the fluff.
• It doesn’t matter how great your ideas are, before a final draft you can always make your writing leaner and meaner. Cut 10 words from each page
• If cutting those 10 words was relatively easy, cut 10 more words.
• Repeat step 2 until firm.

Step 3: Take all your topic sentences, copy and paste them next to each other, and read through for flow
• Are you suffering from “list-essay” writing (Another point is….Also….Thirdly….)
• Do these sentences help the reader see why you’re saying what your saying (“Instead of just focusing on Y, however, we must first examine Y”)
• If readers just read these sentences would they get the gist of the paper?


Step 4: run a “readability” test in MS Word
• Is your reading ease score below 50? Fail.
• Is your grade level above 12? Fail.
• Is your passive sentence percentage above 5%? Fail.
Ways to make your writing more readable:
• remove prepositions (to, at, with, by, from, etc)
• use simpler word forms (infanthood = infant; vaccincation = vaccine)
• use shorter sentences

Step 5: Check your writing style DNA
• Use the “Find” function (CTRL-F) to search for words or phrases you habitually use too much (However? In other words? Women? The internet? Nerds?) and replace them with synonyms – this can actually make your ideas more sophisticated

Step 6: Check sentence length:
• Use the “Find function (CTRL-F) to display your essay sentence by sentence. If all your sentences are the same length, shorten some and lengthen others. This makes your writing both more readable and gives you a second chance to use sentence style to reinforce your meaning.

Step 7: Highlight sentences/phrases/words you need to fix:
• Needs more evidence/support
• Sounds awkward…fix wording
• Needs more analysis/explanation
• Maybe unnecessary? Consider deleting?

Step 8: Highlight notes to yourself for material that needs to be added:

Example
Therefore, instead of banning the fast food, the government should focus on adjusting the ingredient and portion of the food of all restaurants, not only the fast food restaurants, and educate people better about what is healthy to eat. The City of New York took different approach to fight the people’s health problems than the City of Los Angeles. [explain more about why this might only work in big cities like New York] The City of New York decided to regulate restaurants to provide calorie counts on the menus and this seems to be more effective than simply banning restaurants.

Step 9: Highlight words that need to be replaced
In first drafts we often don’t use the precise word to describe things since we’re focusing on our ideas. Final drafts give you a chance to be exact
• Write [change word]
• Copy this text (CTRL-C]
• Scroll through your essay, and whenever you see a vague or imprecise word, paste this phrase right after it (CTRL-V)

Step 10: Before you turn in your paper
• Proofread aloud from a printout
• Ask a friend or classmate to read it
• Run a plain ol’ spell check.